Theo Hart

I'm rooting for Galbatorix and the Ra'zac, personally. The figure was tall, handsome, and devilishly sexy. His face was finely chiseled, manly and his eyes were crepuscular pools of magma ...

THIS story sounds painfully similar to mine, which I've posted 3 days ago. Good job. You've copied my title and sent a link to your site!!!!!!!!! How dare you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I really liked your prologue, or the prologue of the prologue. Under most circumstances, "random" and literature don't mix. In this case, though, the linear nature of the thing, in ...

I like your style--it flows quite well. Very easy to read, while simultaneously including slight subtleties. Very nice. I do have a few issues, however: They, they who care, who ...

Whoo-dang, you are evil ! I love it, thus far. Didn't see any major problems with the narrative structure. Everything, in that area, is pretty clear. I also liked how ...